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Oct 29 06 4:34 AM

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Har ik paal jo tere ragho mein duad ta hey
Woh tera lahu laal rang ka hey
Laali hey pyar ka rang
Gusse meh chehara hota hey laal
Sharm se uska chehara bhi laal
Zindagi ke har ik jazbaat ko laal rang se sajaya
Tume kaun si laali pasand hey
Yeh tumpe choda hey aaj


I just came up with these lines and i reqt you to correct the mistakes plz plz plz correct them
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Oct 29 06 7:55 AM

bahut saach likha Amith bhai, LAL rang hi asa hai,

DULHAN KA JODA BHI LAL
MAANG MEH SINDUR BHI LAL
MEHNDI KA RAANG BHI LAL
AUR GHUM MEH PINAY WALA BHI SHERAB KO LAL RAANG KA NAAM DETA HAI

WELL WRITTEN.

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Oct 29 06 6:57 PM

QUOTE (Anushka @ October 29, 2006 07:55 am)
bahut saach likha Amith bhai, LAL rang hi asa hai,

DULHAN KA JODA BHI LAL
MAANG MEH SINDUR BHI LAL
MEHNDI KA RAANG BHI LAL
AUR GHUM MEH PINAY WALA BHI SHERAB KO LAL RAANG KA NAAM DETA HAI

WELL WRITTEN.

True Anu di ........ thank you for reading this poem

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Oct 29 06 9:56 PM

QUOTE (annji-d-pagal @ October 29, 2006 04:34 am)
Har ik paal jo tere ragho mein duad ta hey
Woh tera lahu laal rang ka hey
Laali hey pyar ka rang
Gusse meh chehara hota hey laal
Sharm se uska chehara bhi laal
Zindagi ke har ik jazbaat ko laal rang se sajaya
Tume kaun si laali pasand hey
Yeh tumpe choda hey aaj


I just came up with these lines and i reqt you to correct the mistakes plz plz plz correct them

ANNJI JI

BAHUT PYARA LIKHA justju/icon_clap.gif justju/icon_clap.gif

LAL RANG KA KAMAL NAJAR AARAHA HE HAR SABD ME

SHAKUN PANCHHI LAYE AAS
SHUKOON KA LAYE AHSAS

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Oct 29 06 10:38 PM

QUOTE (shakun @ October 29, 2006 09:56 pm)
QUOTE (annji-d-pagal @ October 29, 2006 04:34 am)
Har ik paal jo tere ragho mein duad ta hey
Woh tera lahu laal rang ka hey
Laali hey pyar ka rang
Gusse meh chehara hota hey laal
Sharm se uska chehara bhi laal
Zindagi ke har ik jazbaat ko laal rang se sajaya
Tume kaun si laali pasand hey
Yeh tumpe choda hey aaj


I just came up with these lines and i reqt you to correct the mistakes plz plz plz correct them

ANNJI JI

BAHUT PYARA LIKHA justju/icon_clap.gif justju/icon_clap.gif

LAL RANG KA KAMAL NAJAR AARAHA HE HAR SABD ME

Thank you for reading Shakun ji .... bahut shukriya

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Oct 30 06 9:37 AM

QUOTE (annji-d-pagal @ October 29, 2006 06:57 pm)
QUOTE (Anushka @ October 29, 2006 07:55 am)
bahut saach likha  Amith bhai, LAL rang hi asa hai,

DULHAN KA JODA BHI LAL
MAANG MEH SINDUR BHI LAL
MEHNDI KA RAANG BHI LAL
AUR GHUM MEH PINAY WALA BHI SHERAB KO LAL RAANG KA NAAM DETA HAI

WELL WRITTEN.

True Anu di ........ thank you for reading this poem

you are welcome bhai

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Oct 30 06 6:14 PM

QUOTE (Anushka @ October 30, 2006 09:37 am)
QUOTE (annji-d-pagal @ October 29, 2006 06:57 pm)
QUOTE (Anushka @ October 29, 2006 07:55 am)
bahut saach likha  Amith bhai, LAL rang hi asa hai,

DULHAN KA JODA BHI LAL
MAANG MEH SINDUR BHI LAL
MEHNDI KA RAANG BHI LAL
AUR GHUM MEH PINAY WALA BHI SHERAB KO LAL RAANG KA NAAM DETA HAI

WELL WRITTEN.

True Anu di ........ thank you for reading this poem

you are welcome bhai

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