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Sep 6 06 11:09 PM

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ham jab shayree kee baat karte hain bas sochte hain us par premika ka haq hai. kabhee khayal nahee ata un patniyon ka jo shayron ke mushkil swbhaw ke bawzood un se nibhatee hain un ka sath detee hain. un se pyar kartee hain un se lartee hain magar pyar kam anhee hota. meree ye nazm hai un sabhee patniyon ke nam jihono kisee kee zindgee ko baharon se saja diya par haan kabhee kabhee woh apne pati ke pyar ko pahchan nahee payeen kyon ke un ke liye kuch likha hee nahee gaya kabhee
ANil


bahut se tukron main banta hoon
bahut se doston kee hissedaree hai
zindgee maine bahut se
rishton main guzaree hai
mara kuch doston ke sath hans ke too chaltee hai
kuch doston se too jaltee hai

na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai
zindgee har kash-m-kash ke bawazood
sath chaltee thee sath chaltee hai
agarche sochta rahata hoon baraha
mere kuh doston se too kyon jaltee hai
kahan mera kusoor hai kahan unkee galtee hai
na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai

bahut se tukron main banta hoon main
par khud se door kab hata hoon main
gour kar mujh par main bikhra nahee hoon
jis ka hath thama tha toone kal
main aaj bhee to wahee hoon

bikhra nahee hoon bichhara nahee hoon
mere hazar tukre bhee kar diye jayen
to har tukra mujh main aur main tujh rahoonga
bakee koyee sawal na kar aye meree zindgee
yahee sach hai main yahee kahoonga

tera hath mere hathon main rahega
tera zikr meree baton main rahega
too phir bhee har lafz main kisee ko sochtee rahegee
har baat pe khafa hogee mujhe toktee rahegee
mere doston se besabab jaltee rahegee
ye sab hoga magar
zindgee tere sath chaltee hai chaltee rahegee

ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai
zingdee tere sath yoonn hee chalegee yoon hee chaltee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai

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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Sep 7 06 12:06 AM

Anilji aapki yea kalam pedker dil kuch halka aur kuch aur udas hua hai, lekin bahut hi acha likha hai... aur aseh hi likhtay rehiyea gah please.
Thanks so much Anil

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Sep 7 06 7:41 AM

QUOTE (masoomshayer @ September 06, 2006 11:09 pm)
ham jab shayree kee baat karte hain bas sochte hain us par premika ka haq hai. kabhee khayal nahee ata un patniyon ka jo shayron ke mushkil swbhaw ke bawzood un se nibhatee hain un ka sath detee hain. un se pyar kartee hain un se lartee hain magar pyar kam anhee hota. meree ye nazm hai un sabhee patniyon ke nam jihono kisee kee zindgee ko baharon se saja diya par haan kabhee kabhee woh apne pati ke pyar ko pahchan nahee payeen kyon ke un ke liye kuch likha hee nahee gaya kabhee
ANil


bahut se tukron main banta hoon
bahut se doston kee hissedaree hai
zindgee maine bahut se
rishton main guzaree hai
mara kuch doston ke sath hans ke too chaltee hai
kuch doston se too jaltee hai

na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai
zindgee har kash-m-kash ke bawazood
sath chaltee thee sath chaltee hai
agarche sochta rahata hoon baraha
mere kuh doston se too kyon jaltee hai
kahan mera kusoor hai kahan unkee galtee hai
na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai

bahut se tukron main banta hoon main
par khud se door kab hata hoon main
gour kar mujh par main bikhra nahee hoon
jis ka hath thama tha toone kal
main aaj bhee to wahee hoon

bikhra nahee hoon bichhara nahee hoon
mere hazar tukre bhee kar diye jayen
to har tukra mujh main aur main tujh rahoonga
bakee koyee sawal na kar aye meree zindgee
yahee sach hai main yahee kahoonga

tera hath mere hathon main rahega
tera zikr meree baton main rahega
too phir bhee har lafz main kisee ko sochtee rahegee
har baat pe khafa hogee mujhe toktee rahegee
mere doston se besabab jaltee rahegee
ye sab hoga magar
zindgee tere sath chaltee hai chaltee rahegee

ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai
zingdee tere sath yoonn hee chalegee yoon hee chaltee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai

Anil ji,
Har rachna ki tarah yeh yeh bhi khub likhi hai, aru sahi bhi kaha hai kayi bar hum unko bhul jate jo humare sath hote hain , jo sath dete hain. aur kayi baar hum apne mein itna kho jate hain, unka pyaar bhi dikhayi nahi deta.

Sabse badhi baat aap mein yeh dekhi gayi hain har bar ek alag vishaye par apni rachna likhte ho.


ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai
zingdee tere sath yoonn hee chalegee yoon hee chaltee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai

sach kaha hai. shukriya.--- apna khayal rakhain.

nira

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Sep 7 06 8:09 AM

QUOTE (masoomshayer @ September 06, 2006 11:09 pm)
ham jab shayree kee baat karte hain bas sochte hain us par premika ka haq hai. kabhee khayal nahee ata un patniyon ka jo shayron ke mushkil swbhaw ke bawzood un se nibhatee hain un ka sath detee hain. un se pyar kartee hain un se lartee hain magar pyar kam anhee hota. meree ye nazm hai un sabhee patniyon ke nam jihono kisee kee zindgee ko baharon se saja diya par haan kabhee kabhee woh apne pati ke pyar ko pahchan nahee payeen kyon ke un ke liye kuch likha hee nahee gaya kabhee
ANil


bahut se tukron main banta hoon
bahut se doston kee hissedaree hai
zindgee maine bahut se
rishton main guzaree hai
mara kuch doston ke sath hans ke too chaltee hai
kuch doston se too jaltee hai

na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai
zindgee har kash-m-kash ke bawazood
sath chaltee thee sath chaltee hai
agarche sochta rahata hoon baraha
mere kuh doston se too kyon jaltee hai
kahan mera kusoor hai kahan unkee galtee hai
na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai

bahut se tukron main banta hoon main
par khud se door kab hata hoon main
gour kar mujh par main bikhra nahee hoon
jis ka hath thama tha toone kal
main aaj bhee to wahee hoon

bikhra nahee hoon bichhara nahee hoon
mere hazar tukre bhee kar diye jayen
to har tukra mujh main aur main tujh rahoonga
bakee koyee sawal na kar aye meree zindgee
yahee sach hai main yahee kahoonga

tera hath mere hathon main rahega
tera zikr meree baton main rahega
too phir bhee har lafz main kisee ko sochtee rahegee
har baat pe khafa hogee mujhe toktee rahegee
mere doston se besabab jaltee rahegee
ye sab hoga magar
zindgee tere sath chaltee hai chaltee rahegee

ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai
zingdee tere sath yoonn hee chalegee yoon hee chaltee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai

anil this is the best i haver read...shayad main bhi ik aam si aurat hun...aur shayad har aurat ki taha main bhi yehi sochti hun ki kab mera hamsafar mujh par nazar karenge...kab mujhe mera jaiz maqaam denge...par na hi us nazar main wo kashish hoti hai jisse har aurat talashti hai na hi lehje main wo tapish hoti hai jisse har aurat mehsoos karna chahti hai...pata nahi kyon band kar lete hai saare mard apne aap ko kuch express karne se...shayad BIWI lafz hi hai compromises ka sacrifises...bakhoobi jaante hai aap log ke ye ab kahin nahi jaigi...band jo gai hai mujh se...jab jeena hai uske sang saari zindagi to thoda pyaar kyon na baant le...n i think anil u have done full justice to these feelings...aaj shayad meri shikayat duur hue aapse...humesha kehti thi aapse ke apne humsafar par kuch likhen...aaj aapne kamaal kar diya...khush rahen sada god bless...

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Sep 7 06 11:36 AM

anil ji maine kaha thaa na app is yug ke ram ho.....mera kehna ajj apne saach kar diya....or mujhe lagta hai ki is yug main koi dhobi nahi aiye ga or seeta ji ko agni pariksha nahi deni paregi.....bhabhi ji bhut khush kismat hai jo app unke naseeb main ho ....bhai agar saach kahu to hum to is mamle main krishan ji se bhee chaar qadam aage hai....app ki feelings bhut achi lagi...kaya khub apne khyalon ko nazam main byaan kiya hai.....yu hee hume thori bhut akal dete rehna....or yu hee acha acha likhte rehna....take care.......raj.......

kush kehta hoon.....

patni tum ek aisa nagma ho,
jo aksar mere honto pe rehta hai,

premika tum ek aise gazal ho,
jo jayke ke liye kabhi kabhi,
gungunane ko jee karta hai,

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Sep 7 06 12:04 PM

Masoom shayar ji,

Aapne yeh kalam likh kar aaj kamaal hee kar diya aurr muje tou rajveer ka reply parhke muskaan aa gyi yug ke ram ho aap aisa keh rha woh ..

ab main kuch kahu...

jeevansangini se pyaar baanta tha kabhi.. yeh apne dil se pooch lena aaj...
uski aankhon mein apna jahaan mehsoos kiya tha kabhi yeh apne dil se pooch lena
pooch lena apne dil se kya sach mein chaha tha usse..
kyun na samaj paayi woh aapko ki dosti kar baithe aap usko chorke sabse..
kabhi uski aankhon mein woh nazar aaya jo aapke dil ko samaj na aaya..
pyaar mein hota hai yeh aksar..
sachaa pyaar paana jitna mushkil hai utna hee mushkil hai uss sachee pyaar ko samaj paana..


soch lo samaj lo.. aaram se jwab dena

shona

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Unke Ishq mein doob jaane ko dil yeh chahta hai..
Har pal nye khwaab sajane ko dil yeh chahta hai..
Koi kahe unko ki laut aaye mere paas..
Ki unko apni bahon mein bharne ko dil yeh chahta hai..

"SHONA"

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Sep 10 06 2:31 PM

bus yahi ek sach hai ki pati patni ka rishta anokha hai kitne bhi ladhe kitna bhi jale
lekin ye rishta sab rishto se bebadha hai aur sabhi aam si hoti hai patniyan
bhaut bhaut caring bhaut sa pyaar ek maa ka roop bhi hai isme sab kuch deti hai apne ko kurbaan karke har pal ghar ko sanwarti hai

aapki ye rachna bhaut khoob bani hai

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Sep 11 06 5:34 PM

QUOTE (masoomshayer @ September 06, 2006 11:09 pm)




Anil……bahut khoob likha hai aaj in per likh ker bahut achcha kaam kiya….sach mein shayar ki biwi hona bere himmat ka kaam hai…aura nil hi….…..duniya ki patniyo ke liye likh sakte hai…
Aur kaun in per kabhi sochega
..to unki taraf se bhi koi likhne wala hona chahiye……………patniyo ki taraf se hi unke dil ki dharken hai

[SIZE=7]Aaj tumhe meri bhi yaad aai hai
Jo kalam mujh per utthai hai
Kya sab topic fana ho gaye
Ya aaj kuch hararat aaii hai…..

Kya tum vo nahi ho
Jo her waqt chand suraj takte the…
Mein sabbzi ki kaheti thi..
Tum baal apne savarte the…..

Shayaro ki kalam mein kab patniya aai hai
Rashmi julfo mein khoye rahenge
Vo to lahero mein dobenge aur parindo se urenge
Zameen mein chalna vo kab seekhenge

ger aaj tumne meri aur sach mein dekha hai.
mere paas bhi dil hai kuch yu socha hai……
mere paas lafz nahi per ahesaas to hai
sun sakte ho to zera pyar se suno

tum chahe phool dekho aur chahe khar
chahe suraj per likho ya chad ko tako
mein to sirf tumko dekhti ho…..
tere saath hi saare spne bunti ho…….
Tujhi mein phool tujhi mein khar chunti ho
Isliye tere kuch dosto ke saath chalti ho aur kuch se jalti ho

Aadatan mera jalna zarrori hai
Zindagi mein kuch khatpat zaroori hai
Are koi na mile to dosto ke naam per hi
Jhager lena zaroori hai………
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Sep 11 06 6:48 PM

mishthi tum ne site par kam sambhal ek site ko ek mithas dee hai apne achhe shabdon aur vicharon se apana khayal rakahana aur meree shayree ko apna sath bhee dena
Anil

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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Sep 11 06 6:49 PM

razoo jee tum ne apne dil kee har baat kah dee meree shayree ke bahav main bahut achha laga ki kaheen dil ko chhoo gayee tumhe meree shayree aur tum ne jo bhee likha jawab main lajwab hai
Anil

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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Sep 11 06 6:51 PM

wah rajveer kya kamal likh gaye tum tum ne itana bara kar diya mujeh ki mujhe khud se milne ek liye behe uchakana pare is meeteh se jhooth ek loye bahut sa payar apana bahut sa khayal rakhana
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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Sep 11 06 6:52 PM

shona bahut bahut shukriya aur jo sawal tum ne pooche hain woh meree jeevansangni se pocohana use hee maloom hoga na mere pyar kee gahrayee
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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Sep 11 06 6:54 PM

archana tum ne meree kavita se kaheen achee kavita aur baat kah dee bahut bahut shurkiya achha laga tumhara har shabd
Anil

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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Aug 2 07 8:22 PM

QUOTE (masoomshayer @ September 06, 2006 11:09 pm)
ham jab shayree kee baat karte hain bas sochte hain us par premika ka haq hai. kabhee khayal nahee ata un patniyon ka jo shayron ke mushkil swbhaw ke bawzood un se nibhatee hain un ka sath detee hain. un se pyar kartee hain un se lartee hain magar pyar kam anhee hota. meree ye nazm hai un sabhee patniyon ke nam jihono kisee kee zindgee ko baharon se saja diya par haan kabhee kabhee woh apne pati ke pyar ko pahchan nahee payeen kyon ke un ke liye kuch likha hee nahee gaya kabhee
ANil


bahut se tukron main banta hoon
bahut se doston kee hissedaree hai
zindgee maine bahut se
rishton main guzaree hai
mara kuch doston ke sath hans ke too chaltee hai
kuch doston se too jaltee hai

na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai
zindgee har kash-m-kash ke bawazood
sath chaltee thee sath chaltee hai
agarche sochta rahata hoon baraha
mere kuh doston se too kyon jaltee hai
kahan mera kusoor hai kahan unkee galtee hai
na tera asar badalta hai kabhee
na maree taseer badltee hai

bahut se tukron main banta hoon main
par khud se door kab hata hoon main
gour kar mujh par main bikhra nahee hoon
jis ka hath thama tha toone kal
main aaj bhee to wahee hoon

bikhra nahee hoon bichhara nahee hoon
mere hazar tukre bhee kar diye jayen
to har tukra mujh main aur main tujh rahoonga
bakee koyee sawal na kar aye meree zindgee
yahee sach hai main yahee kahoonga

tera hath mere hathon main rahega
tera zikr meree baton main rahega
too phir bhee har lafz main kisee ko sochtee rahegee
har baat pe khafa hogee mujhe toktee rahegee
mere doston se besabab jaltee rahegee
ye sab hoga magar
zindgee tere sath chaltee hai chaltee rahegee

ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai
zingdee tere sath yoonn hee chalegee yoon hee chaltee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai



Anil ji...bahot sachi aur pyari si nazm hai....bas padha aur...ye laga han sahi hai....jo b likha hai!....

tc

Komal

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Aug 2 07 9:30 PM

Anil bhaiya.....

is kavita ne to hume sochne pe majboor kar diya....agar role reversal ho jaye to....poetess ke pati par kya gujarti hogi...yeh sochne lagi mai...itna mushkil hai na kaviyon ka sath nibhana to kaviyetriyon ka sath nibhana to!!!!!

achcha laga aapko paDhna aur aapne sach pochiye to unpe likhkar bahut achcha kiya jo actually is creativity ko panapne ke liye apne partnes ko space aur time deti hain...

really its only due to their patience and understanding that these beautiful words can find their presence in the world of art.

regards
aarya

regards
aarya


khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii

lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii


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Aug 2 07 10:58 PM

arya jee aap ne bahut sundar tareeke se apen vichar diye hain bahut bahut shukriya aap ka

Anil

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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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Aug 2 07 11:10 PM

tera hath mere hathon main rahega
tera zikr meree baton main rahega
too phir bhee har lafz main kisee ko sochtee rahegee
har baat pe khafa hogee mujhe toktee rahegee
mere doston se besabab jaltee rahegee
ye sab hoga magar
zindgee tere sath chaltee hai chaltee rahegee

ye zindgee toonne dee nahee par
toone sanwaree hai
ye alag baat hai dost chhootate nahee kabhee magar
too mujhe mere har dost se pyaree hai
na tera kusoor hai na meree koyee galtee hai
bas adatan too mere kuch doston se jaltee hai

adaab anil ji,kaize hain aap?
bahut hi der ze nazar padi aapki iz lajavaab tehreer per..kya kahun?alfaaz nahi milrahe...
yun kabhi zocha to nahi tha ke her patni aize meri tarah zochti hogi ,kabhi-kabhar hi zahi..peryahan yeh padhker iz baat ka yakeen hogaya.
zach kahun to aapki yeh pyari tehreer padhker zeedhe yehi baat zehan mai aayi ke haan..mere pati ke bhi khayalaat aize honge..honge nahi hone hi chahiye...
kuch hadd tak dil bahut halka hua aapko padhker.

dil ze di hazaaron daad kabool karen,likhte rahen yunhin.

U BIN BULAAYE MILNE CHALA AATA HAI,
GHAM KO MUJHSE YEH UNSIYAT KAISI??

---AKELIJAAN---

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Aug 3 07 7:38 AM

akelee jaan bahut bahut shukriya meree kavita ko samjhne ke liye aur us kee rooh ko pardne ke liye khud se use jod ke dekhne ke liye
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ye ram kee rahamat hai raheem kee ramayan
tum jis ko kahate ho masoom ka pagalpan

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