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Apr 15 08 10:57 PM

QUOTE (dheerendra @ January 01, 2008 11:58 pm)
sakhi ji.. bahut dino baad is section main aaya aur ate hi ate apka
dil chhoo lene vala kalam padne ko mila...
bahut accha likha hai apne... dad hazir hai........

shurkiya itara ji apne saraha

acha lagta hai apka aana mere kisi bhi page pe..

aate rahna

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Apr 15 08 11:03 PM

QUOTE (ahsaAs @ February 28, 2008 10:46 pm)
Sakhi jee........

Bohutt khoobsurat likha hai aapne ! Aakhiri line me jo baat keh diya aapne, wo man ko jhankjhor gaya. Sach me aisa hee feel hota hai.

Keep sharing.

ahsas ji sahi kaha apne...last lilne ka marm aap jaan gaye eacha lagaa

kai baate hoti hai jo hamein rula jati hai unme se ek mahtvpoorna bata hai ye ..
aate rahna apka ana acha lagta hai sadaa

sakhi with love

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Apr 16 08 11:37 PM

tanhaaiyaa mili to ham ghbara ke ro diye
jab yaad teri aai to dil tadpaa ke ro diye

jab naa dikha koi hamein apne aas pass
tab yaad teri har taraf bikhara ke ro diye

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye
tanhaaiyaa mili to ham ghbara ke ro diye
jab yaad teri aai to dil tadpaa ke ro diye

jab naa dikha koi hamein apne aas pass
tab yaad teri har taraf bikhara ke ro diye

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi


koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi

Bahut khoob Sakhi ji

main ab is ki tareef nahin kersata
bahut hi umda likha hai

meri taraf se dad qubool karain

Jab bhi aankhain bheegeen
her aansu mein tera chehra



tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye


Jab dukh ne bhi sath choda ghabra kero diye




javed

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#65 [url]

Apr 19 08 1:56 AM

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

wow sakhi ji,simple yet heart touching one....

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#67 [url]

Apr 30 08 10:25 AM

Diiiiiiiiii Aapko yun udaas dekh kar hum ro denge! jadoooooo ki jhappi! justju/458.gif justju/458.gif justju/458.gif


If I can stop one heart from breaking,
I shall not live in vain;
If I can ease one life the aching,
Or cool one pain,
Or help a friend in
Unto his nest again,
I shall not live in vain.....
I shall not live in vain...

- Emily Dickinson

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May 1 08 12:26 PM

QUOTE (sakhi1909 @ April 29, 2007 11:33 pm)
aaj kuch khyaal yuhi chale aaye kisi ka likha hua kuch pada to.... apki nazar kar rahi hun mein...apni ye ek dam taza likhi peshkash

tanhaaiyaa mili to ham ghbara ke ro diye
jab yaad teri aai to dil tadpaa ke ro diye

jab naa dikha koi hamein apne aas pass
tab yaad teri har taraf bikhara ke ro diye

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi

Bahut khoobsoorat...very musical,soft and subtle yet carrying loads of pain and sorrow...very well written..keep sharing...enjoyed reading it...

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May 1 08 10:20 PM

सखी जी,

अभिवन्दन

पहली बार आपकी रचना पढ़ी. आपकी अभिव्यक्ति में भावनाओं और अनुभव का सामंजस्य स्पष्ट रूप से दिखाई दिया . यथार्थ में यदि हमारे जीवन से यादें हट जाएँ तो तो शायद हम अधूरे रह जाएँगे. यादे ही तो एक -दूसरे से हमें जोड़े रखती हैं ..

इसलिए आपकी ग़ज़ल सच्चाई के धरातल पर साकार हो उठी है.


तनहाईयाँ मिली तो हम घबरा के रो दिए
जब याद तेरी आई तो दिल तड़पा के रो दिए

जब ना दिखा कोई हमें अपने आस पास
तब याद तेरी हर तरफ बिखरा के रो दिए

तुम इस तरह गये कि हर खुशी साथ ले गये
जब दुख ने आके घेरा तो घबरा के रो दिए

कोई भी याद ना करे हमें आज कल' सखी'
ये बात याद आई तो दिल को समझा के रो दिए

इस ग़ज़ल और ऐसी अभिवक्ति के लिए बधाई.

आपका
विजय तिवारी "किसलय"

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May 1 08 10:53 PM

QUOTE (javedarshad @ April 16, 2008 11:37 pm)

tanhaaiyaa mili to ham ghbara ke ro diye
jab yaad teri aai to dil tadpaa ke ro diye

jab naa dikha koi hamein apne aas pass
tab yaad teri har taraf bikhara ke ro diye

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi


koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi

Bahut khoob Sakhi ji

main ab is ki tareef nahin kersata
bahut hi umda likha hai

meri taraf se dad qubool karain

Jab bhi aankhain bheegeen
her aansu mein tera chehra



tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye


Jab dukh ne bhi sath choda ghabra kero diye




javed

javed ji adab
apko pasand aayee meri gazal ye..bhaut khushi hui...

apki daad sir ankho pe...


Jab bhi aankhain bheegeen
her aansu mein tera chehra

acha ehsas laga ye ...


Jab dukh ne bhi sath choda ghabra kero diye

ye line bhi khub lagee

sakhi justju/643.gif

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#71 [url]

May 1 08 10:58 PM

QUOTE (saira @ April 19, 2008 01:56 am)
tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

wow sakhi ji,simple yet heart touching one....

shurkiya saira ji....apko apsnada ayee bhaut khushi hui...likhne ka hoshala aap logo ke pasand na pasndagi se hi milta hai..

aacha lagta hai apka aana...

sakhi justju/144.gif

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May 1 08 11:04 PM

QUOTE (Asmita @ April 30, 2008 10:25 am)
Diiiiiiiiii Aapko yun udaas dekh kar hum ro denge! jadoooooo ki jhappi! justju/458.gif justju/458.gif justju/458.gif

justju/246.gif dear asmi... justju/458.gif

aap rona nahi ham thik hai dear sis...

bas aap dikhi ham khush ho agye justju/144.gif justju/643.gif yun dekho na

with love

sakhi

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#73 [url]

May 1 08 11:11 PM

QUOTE (Sonali @ May 01, 2008 12:26 pm)
QUOTE (sakhi1909 @ April 29, 2007 11:33 pm)
aaj kuch khyaal yuhi chale aaye kisi ka likha hua kuch pada to.... apki nazar kar rahi hun mein...apni ye ek dam taza likhi peshkash

tanhaaiyaa mili to ham ghbara ke ro diye
jab yaad teri aai to dil tadpaa ke ro diye

jab naa dikha koi hamein apne aas pass
tab yaad teri har taraf bikhara ke ro diye

tum is tarah gaye ki har khushi sath le gaye
jab dukh ne aake ghera to ghabra ke ro diye

koi bhi yaad na kare hamein aaj kal' sakhi'
ye baat yaad aayi to dil ko samjha ke ro diye

sakhi

Bahut khoobsoorat...very musical,soft and subtle yet carrying loads of pain and sorrow...very well written..keep sharing...enjoyed reading it...

shukriya sonali ji apne mujeh aapke pada aur sarah

aapne isko dil s emahsoos kiya hai mere hisab se jo iske har pahloo ne apko chhua hai..acha laga

bhaut bahut shukriya

sakhi justju/144.gif

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May 1 08 11:20 PM

QUOTE (vijaytiwarikislay @ May 01, 2008 10:20 pm)
सखी जी,

अभिवन्दन

पहली बार आपकी रचना पढ़ी. आपकी अभिव्यक्ति में भावनाओं और अनुभव का सामंजस्य स्पष्ट रूप से दिखाई दिया . यथार्थ में यदि हमारे जीवन से यादें हट जाएँ तो तो शायद हम अधूरे रह जाएँगे. यादे ही तो एक -दूसरे से हमें जोड़े रखती हैं ..

इसलिए आपकी ग़ज़ल सच्चाई के धरातल पर साकार हो उठी है.


तनहाईयाँ मिली तो हम घबरा के रो दिए
जब याद तेरी आई तो दिल तड़पा के रो दिए

जब ना दिखा कोई हमें अपने आस पास
तब याद तेरी हर तरफ बिखरा के रो दिए

तुम इस तरह गये कि हर खुशी साथ ले गये
जब दुख ने आके घेरा तो घबरा के रो दिए

कोई भी याद ना करे हमें आज कल' सखी'
ये बात याद आई तो दिल को समझा के रो दिए

इस ग़ज़ल और ऐसी अभिवक्ति के लिए बधाई.

आपका
विजय तिवारी "किसलय"

kislay ji

bahut acha laga apko yahan dekha ..aur itne ache tareeke se apne ispe rvw diya ki dil khush ho gya...bhaut khub laga andaz..

sahi kaha yaade hi hai jo jeene ka sahara hoti hai jeevan poora karti hai..

bas yuhi aate rahna

hoshla dena

sakhi justju/smiley-faces22.gif

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