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Apr 24 07 4:59 PM

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kush khyaal jehain mein ubhre main unko kagaz par utrne se rook nahi paaya......lijiye aap sabke saat baant raha hoon....umeed hai aapko ache lagenge......


khud jal kar ooro ko roshni dena
khud mit kar ooro ko zindagi dena
ye hunar tum jab seekh jaaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......

kisi ka ek aansu bhi gar pee liya tumne
ek pal mein sara jeevan jee liya tumne
kisi ke gam ko seene se jo laga liya tumne
samjho har dil mein ghar bana liya tumne.......

kisi ke zakham pe jab marham ban jaoge
kisi ki khatir jab suli pe chad jaoge
kisi ke hisse ka jab tum zehar pee jaoge
jab insaniyat ko nai raah tum dikhlaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge.........


aapka raj..........
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Apr 24 07 5:35 PM

khud jal kar ooro ko roshni dena
khud mit kar ooro ko zindagi dena
ye hunar tum jab seekh jaaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......



Wah.....bohat khoob ..Bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne veer jee



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Is nazm mein ki har ek pankti sachhai bayaa kar rahi hai...bohat kareeb se mehsoos kiya hai aapne in ehsaaso ko Sach mein bohat dino baad kuch alag aur khoobsurat padhhe ko mila

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Apr 24 07 5:38 PM

QUOTE (rajveer @ April 24, 2007 04:59 pm)
kush khyaal jehain mein ubhre main unko kagaz par utrne se rook nahi paaya......lijiye aap sabke saat baant raha hoon....umeed hai aapko ache lagenge......


khud jal kar ooro ko roshni dena
khud mit kar ooro ko zindagi dena
ye hunar tum jab seekh jaaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......

kisi ka ek aansu bhi gar pee liya tumne
ek pal mein sara jeevan jee liya tumne
kisi ke gam ko seene se jo laga liya tumne
samjho har dil mein ghar bana liya tumne.......

kisi ke zakham pe jab marham ban jaoge
kisi ki khatir jab suli pe chad jaoge
kisi ke hisse ka jab tum zehar pee jaoge
jab insaniyat ko nai raah tum dikhlaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge.........


aapka raj..........

khud jal kar ooro ko roshni dena
khud mit kar ooro ko zindagi dena
ye hunar tum jab seekh jaaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......


sahi kha hai dost tumne aaj ke es youg main sayad hi koi mukamal insaan hoga
aaj sab ke sab sirf apne bare main sochte hai


keep writing and keep smiling

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Apr 24 07 5:40 PM

QUOTE (rajveer @ April 24, 2007 04:59 pm)
kush khyaal jehain mein ubhre main unko kagaz par utrne se rook nahi paaya......lijiye aap sabke saat baant raha hoon....umeed hai aapko ache lagenge......


khud jal kar ooro ko roshni dena
khud mit kar ooro ko zindagi dena
ye hunar tum jab seekh jaaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......

kisi ka ek aansu bhi gar pee liya tumne
ek pal mein sara jeevan jee liya tumne
kisi ke gam ko seene se jo laga liya tumne
samjho har dil mein ghar bana liya tumne.......

kisi ke zakham pe jab marham ban jaoge
kisi ki khatir jab suli pe chad jaoge
kisi ke hisse ka jab tum zehar pee jaoge
jab insaniyat ko nai raah tum dikhlaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge.........


aapka raj..........

janab rajveer ji namaskar

aaj ke dour main is prakar ki soch rakhna bahut badii baat hai or ye aap jaisa shayar hi kah sakta hai
janab aaj ka jamana wo jamana hai jahan apne bhii apne nahi hai......

bashir sahab ki kuch pankitiya jehan main unhar aayin

" aaj ka dour wo dour hai jahan mahfooz kuch bhii nahi
jeb main rakh ke apna naam pata ghar se nikla kigiye"

wankii ek khoobsurat kalam se jyada aapke khoobsurat vicharon per dad hazir hai

shukriyaa

dilip

Jindgii jane ko thii
humen mout ko bula liya
kya kare.n humse akele raha nahi gaya

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Apr 24 07 6:41 PM

har line mein ek seekh de gaye ho
tum bhi ye dost kya khub jee gaye ho

raj ji bahut khub likha hai apne

sakhi ki dad kubul kare ek behtreen rachana pe
sakhi

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Apr 24 07 6:48 PM

kisi ke zakham pe jab marham ban jaoge
kisi ki khatir jab suli pe chad jaoge
kisi ke hisse ka jab tum zehar pee jaoge
jab insaniyat ko nai raah tum dikhlaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge.........

well said raj ji..bahoot khoob,bahut umdah bayaani ki.poori nazm lajawaab hai.yunhin likhte rahen,khush rahen.

U BIN BULAAYE MILNE CHALA AATA HAI,
GHAM KO MUJHSE YEH UNSIYAT KAISI??

---AKELIJAAN---

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Apr 24 07 10:00 PM

sach ko bohat achi tarah se aap ne apnay kalaam meiN dhaala hay Rajveer ji, good work

Sometimes I cut myself to see how much I bleed and how much it hurts!!!!

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Apr 24 07 11:28 PM

kisi ke zakham pe jab marham ban jaoge
kisi ki khatir jab suli pe chad jaoge
kisi ke hisse ka jab tum zehar pee jaoge
jab insaniyat ko nai raah tum dikhlaoge
tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge......tabhi tum mukamal insaa.N kehlaoge.........

rajveer jee ...

aapki rachna ne her insaan ko ye bataya hai ki insaan kaun hota hai ..kaisa hota hai.........aapko per ker bahut achcha laga.........

apna khayal rakhiyega.........ek rah dikhati rachna hai........hum sur jhkate hai

archana

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Apr 25 07 5:49 PM

Insaa.N mookmamal kidhar ho patah hat gar ho patah toh khooda ban jata


ik khiyaal aapkay liayay



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eelzaam deyngay tojhay bykaar kahaganay
zinda kee karay kadar esa nai momkeen
mar jaaogay toh tomkoh parwardigaar kahanaygay

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